Thread:IceOccultism/@comment-32769624-20180814035701/@comment-36536421-20180818214736

Hi, no problem, just realised you posted here (didn't get notified for some reason).

I'd like to suggest more edits to the Synopsis page, since it's not accessible to me. This part:

"Subaru returned from his death, panicing and started to think about his past, thinking about when he put a cup in the sink without washing it, burdening his mother. He then accidentally ran into Reid and was stabbed by his chopsticks. In a panic, Subaru ran away and almost fell down the stairs again and was thinking of telling everyone he can Return by Death, only to have Satella appear, grabbing his heart and vacating his bowels. "

I would change it something like: "Subaru returned from his death and starts to panic. He runs away from Emilia and Beatrice thinking that in his delirious state that Emilia had pushed him off the staircase in the prior loop. He then acidentally ran into Reid and was non-fatally stabbed by his chopsticks. He was kicked out of the room by Reid and almost falls down a staircase again. He starts to think about his past, thinking about when he put a cup in the sink without washing it, burdening his mother. He sees a shadow and attempts to mention Return by Death, only to have Satella appear, grabbing his heart and vacating his bowels."

The reasons why I think it's better is because he doesn't actually think about burdening his mother until after he nearly fell down the staircase. He also was to my knowledge kicked by Reid out of the room and nearly fell down that staircase as a result of the kick. I also think adding that he runs away from Emilia and Beatrice could be useful information because she had been patting his back and he thought that she had pushed him in his delirium. I also don't think that he explicitly said that he was going to tell everyone about RbD, it was more like it happened as he was voicing his delirium out. Let me know what you think!